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Post by ElijahsGreyPanthers on May 24, 2007 22:30:55 GMT -5
(This one really got me...I think I added in an extra 'my' so this would work...ummm...don't tell ) I breathe the scent of the sweet Spring blossom I let linger around my smile. A beautiful day and I relax, carefree In a trance from my world As from dust, white wings broke, and I abandon discontent as I dove up to my angel.
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Post by mywar on May 24, 2007 22:36:44 GMT -5
Interesting choice of words in the last 2 lines. I like your style.
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Post by ElijahsGreyPanthers on May 24, 2007 22:57:40 GMT -5
Thank you
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Post by - Moirae - on May 26, 2007 18:23:34 GMT -5
well you not gonna be penalized for one extra word ...good work EGP!
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Post by ElijahsGreyPanthers on May 29, 2007 0:10:03 GMT -5
Thanks
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