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Aug 7, 2007 1:01:58 GMT -5
Post by Tamale Girl on Aug 7, 2007 1:01:58 GMT -5
Come, child, for a brief encounter;
breathe in innocence from my perfect sanctuary
as pouring stars drip in puddles.
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Aug 7, 2007 1:35:51 GMT -5
Post by texcymbal on Aug 7, 2007 1:35:51 GMT -5
Beautiful brief poem. Full of magic & wonder. I like your avatar as well.
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Aug 8, 2007 13:19:52 GMT -5
Post by pafaniqz on Aug 8, 2007 13:19:52 GMT -5
Seems natural, which is hard to do with this. Does it bother anyone that there's no "the"?
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Aug 12, 2007 0:04:09 GMT -5
Post by inflames on Aug 12, 2007 0:04:09 GMT -5
Oh this was wonderful. Just a natural, tender piece.
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Aug 12, 2007 20:35:25 GMT -5
Post by TheBlackHearted on Aug 12, 2007 20:35:25 GMT -5
Your avatar gives me nightmares Great short write
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Aug 21, 2007 4:19:45 GMT -5
Post by itsonlyme on Aug 21, 2007 4:19:45 GMT -5
A beautiful, unexpected piece. Very nice. Caryn
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Aug 23, 2007 13:21:31 GMT -5
Post by killerkord on Aug 23, 2007 13:21:31 GMT -5
The naturality of the poem provides vivid imagery and thought, thanks for sharing.
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Aug 24, 2007 17:57:29 GMT -5
Post by Tamale Girl on Aug 24, 2007 17:57:29 GMT -5
XD Thanks to those who commented!
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anthema
Established Muse
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Aug 29, 2007 20:05:33 GMT -5
Post by anthema on Aug 29, 2007 20:05:33 GMT -5
A nice read.
It's interesting to read through these now after having had a go myself and see how the same words suggest different images to different people.
Lovely.
Anthema
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