broken0tlo0
New Member
(music is the food of love)
Posts: 4
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Post by broken0tlo0 on Nov 29, 2007 8:15:02 GMT -5
I sit charming a stranger the diamond is dazzling winter their hands balanced on forehead
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Post by solitude on Nov 29, 2007 13:50:50 GMT -5
The first 3 lines are amazing..wonderful stuff - I wasn't sure I understood the last line though.
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Post by - Moirae - on Nov 29, 2007 19:30:48 GMT -5
I agree with the above poster's comment, the first three lines seemed well done but the last two don't seem quite right to me...maybe I missed the point of your poem
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Post by bcoyotey on Dec 2, 2007 13:14:15 GMT -5
Hello broken. Welcome to TPS. Lady B
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