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Post by solitude on Jan 3, 2008 11:31:19 GMT -5
Green shifting to red Lights observe the captive beast Slick silver shining
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Post by bcoyotey on Jan 7, 2008 16:32:05 GMT -5
Very nicely done, solitude. I love the second line.
Lights observe the captive beast
You have shown that sometimes less is better.
Lady B
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Post by Mystiq on Jan 27, 2008 16:43:27 GMT -5
Hi solitude ... Wow! I like the entire piece. Could truly feel tension in this. Mystiq x
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Post by MidnightInEden on Jan 27, 2008 22:29:02 GMT -5
A lovely haiku, I like the image you've created out of such simplistic language. I can just feel the thrumming of the "silver beast" and its engine. Kudos
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