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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Jan 8, 2009 1:21:18 GMT -5
One of the best drops I have read in my lifetime. My exalt button is gone at the moment, but I know a hug will do just fine.....(((Hugs))) ! This reminded me of a nice, quiet evening at home, a fire burning in the fireplace, champagne in a glass, and this being read to an audience who can truly appreciate wonderful and talented poetry such as this. It should honestly be published in a book, for a gem this shiny and precious should never be hidden away in a chest such as TPS, away from the rest of the world. Wonderfully done, my dear friend! Wonderfully done! Love ya~~~ Stacamia
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Post by bcoyotey on Jan 8, 2009 21:54:22 GMT -5
Oh my! Thank you all so very much. I have such fun with Drops because it revs up the imagination. I love you guys. Hugs. Hugs. Hugs!!! Stace, I'd rather have a hug than an exalt from you any day!!)
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Post by unsinkmolly on Jan 10, 2009 22:52:57 GMT -5
Lady B, you are good!
I fall in the incense of a cordial book [so nicely expressed... incense of a cordial (great word) book] You sit in your chair drinking television [drinking television.. how wonderful... ] We are moody and wooden captives, [love the double o's... and the w's in we and wooden] fermenting in our stone alliance. [fermenting... so nicely put ... and the ref to drinking earlier...liquid.. and the STONE .... ulp! alliance... that sounds like an oxymoron!]
A resourceful match, you and I [resourceful... not a romantic word at all.. but stoic] Me, delicate pink lipstick and blossom scent [nice] You, Travian charm and driving aspirations [don't know Travian... but get the point ] envy of the blind champagne army. [this is interesting but vague for me... are the both of you the envy or just him? a social group that envies you and doesn't get the disconnect ... champagne... and army.. hard to put these together in my head.. a bit jarring ... so far I have been so with you]
Green goblets of white wine shimmer [nice... the g's] in the lamplight on the polished wood. [nice detail.. but foreshadowing you are seeing too much detail.. as you are in your relationship] The cat bends, then curls by the door, [ah... someone less wooden than you two] I decide I want to spring for. 1,936 Sundays in a captive wilderness [and there is more... God.. the exact number] driven to flirt and wink and shine for you [oh dear... falsity] You feast on your Presidential rabbit [is the rabbit you? again rabbit distracted me and was discordant but I liked presidential] I smell the scent of spring. It's over. [this is poignant... though the spring for the door line had me so ready.. and smelling the scent of spring... brings hope and illumination!]
BRAVO!!! Lady B... a joy to read.... m
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Post by Forest on Jan 15, 2009 20:54:57 GMT -5
Wow! Lady B! How did you do this? It's nothing short of genius! Such a spellbinding, entrancing, captivating, write! Just magnificent. I'll give you an exalt when I can, though you'll have to wait in line I'm afraid ;D
Fortunately I can bookmark it!
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Post by clearbluespark on Jan 16, 2009 0:08:43 GMT -5
I love this Lady B! I have been meaning to tell you how beautiful I think it is...and that you did it with the just the drops is amazing! Loved it, and have already re-read it quite a few times... . Thanks! Exalt! ;D
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Post by tentoes on Jan 18, 2009 11:03:19 GMT -5
Oh my goodness! I would call this a masterful piece of work even if it had come free of the constraints and limitations you had to work with. Considering all, even more admiration is due you. This is so very, very good.
For this, I hereby bestow upon you, for outstanding achievement in poetry via the drops of poetry path-- the highest award within my power to give, (and rarely given too), the IWIHWT.
I should explain that this award might mean nothing to the world, but it means the world to me. I read lots of fine poetry. I encounter poets every day whose talent/gift so surpasses my own, but seldom do I read a single piece that inspires the thought- I Wish I Had Written This, (IWIHWT).
LOL, I'm sure you're thinking--- this is a very strange and silly comment. In the end though, I hope you understand what I'm really trying to say about this fine poem.
smiles, toes
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Post by bcoyotey on Jan 28, 2009 14:34:22 GMT -5
Miss Molly, Thank you very much for your time and comment. Forest, Your words made my heart sing. Thank you, thank you! Blue, What a lovely thing to say. Thanks. Toes!!!, (good to see you) From this moment on, the IWIHWT will be my most cherished award.. Thanks sweetie. Lady B
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