Trendy
Wandering Muse
D?game por qu? yo soy tanto en el dolor
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Post by Trendy on Jul 10, 2008 8:18:58 GMT -5
Mother, Yesterday I saw the world Diamonds pooled like groggy waves Like Fish, Fighting for twilight I danced to the dark truth Mother, The queen will love my apple Stars whisper rudely Leave midnight, For noon once believed my magic Echoing round an autumn mountain Mother, The ocean shakes quietly Remember my magic?
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Post by matw63 on Jul 10, 2008 13:25:31 GMT -5
trendy - i love the feel of this piece. it has a deep and dreamy feel to it. i shall be looking out for more of your work matw63
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Post by tsu on Jul 10, 2008 14:17:02 GMT -5
welcome lovely drop..and the end line is brilliant "the ocean shakes quietly remember my magic?" looking forward to more!
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Post by iab on Jul 10, 2008 14:27:19 GMT -5
Dude, this is really good. A beautiful cry.
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Post by €ereza|£inze on Jul 11, 2008 20:55:04 GMT -5
You called this odd, but I think you did a really good job either way. I think it's so hard to make a poem with drops, so I am impressed when I see stuff like this.
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