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Post by jackthenoisymime on May 14, 2009 13:59:20 GMT -5
"Oh Mayor Chunk!"
"Wait Mayor Chunk!" she begs "my papers were obscure propaganda, subway socialism." he laughs then warms oppressed silicon.
[moderate gasp]
Manager rolls adviser. "We, outlined suffix desktop fighter underneath taxpayer representative. Every nut a home!" (hopeful chap.)
Boiled flesh rages.
[suspect groans]
Writer introduces insect censor it axes their stunts.
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Post by ~NevermoreIcon~ on May 14, 2009 15:07:30 GMT -5
this was pretty cool.. it flowed nicely and fast.. great job on this piece.. it is kind of addictive huh?? I am gonna do another one too.. I can't wait to see how it turns out.. oh yeah and "Mayor Chunk" is a kick a-- title as well... superb write..!~NMI
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Post by trailerparkpoe on May 14, 2009 15:25:25 GMT -5
boiled flesh rages. now that is sweet. nice write.
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on May 18, 2009 22:13:21 GMT -5
Loved the dialog in this. Reminded me of a movie script I was reading for an audition. Nicely done.
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