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Post by cjr1217 on Jun 7, 2010 13:47:47 GMT -5
MY DARLING DAUGHTER SPEAKS HE LISTENS, THEN EXPLODES IS SHE DESIRABLE IS HE FAITHFUL DOUBT EMERGES SHE SWEARS IT'S OVER HOW FORESEEABLE THE VOID WANDERING BENEATH THE CONSTANT RAIN A FAIRY FLIES DOWN RENEWING HOPE
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Dilasha
Wandering Muse
[AWD:2e]
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Post by Dilasha on Jun 19, 2010 18:00:04 GMT -5
amazin ! short, sweet and complete!
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Post by unsinkmolly on Jun 26, 2010 12:53:59 GMT -5
love the drama of this. m
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Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Jul 1, 2010 17:13:23 GMT -5
Coherent and easy to identify a family drama in this poem. Good effort.
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Post by cjr1217 on Jul 4, 2010 15:23:44 GMT -5
thank you for your comments Hemz, unsinkmolly and dilasha! It really makes a diffrence when ya check in & see someones commented on what you wrote! this was only my 2nd one but i think i'll attempt more - i'm having fun with it!
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