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Post by Gurl23 on Sept 28, 2010 10:56:17 GMT -5
[glow=gray,2,300] Desirable Rubbish
Doubt whistles in the air. Memory warrants a friendly trigger.
She listens over an audience, Faith speaks outstanding hope...
It's how his rain steers their playground down. [/glow] This is about a woman/girl choosing the wrong man/boy - also relates to another poem I wrote for The TPS Challenge, Unbroken Cycle.
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Post by bcoyotey on Sept 30, 2010 14:02:23 GMT -5
Wonderful Drops. I like your use of color to distinguish the separate voices. Great last line. Kudos.
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Post by knpoet on Oct 9, 2010 9:20:06 GMT -5
Interesting use of Drops, Gurl23 (I was confused at first, until I understood that the Drops had changed again). I loved the use of color, too! I guess all of us choose the wrong person sometimes, the trick is to break the cycle and not go on choosing the wrong person!
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Post by Gurl23 on Oct 9, 2010 22:38:21 GMT -5
Thank you LadyB & knpoet!
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Post by Chels on Oct 30, 2010 21:27:19 GMT -5
I really like the wording of this; says so much in a short space. I especially love the line,
Faith speaks outstanding hope...
Stunning. Wonderful creativity.
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Post by windowflower on Jan 2, 2011 21:51:00 GMT -5
Doubt whistles in the air. Memory warrants a friendly trigger.
this is great.. enjoyed it
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Post by Gurl23 on Jan 7, 2011 23:35:21 GMT -5
Thank you!
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Post by dragonfilth on Jan 22, 2011 19:23:32 GMT -5
very creative love the word play
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Post by Gurl23 on Jan 31, 2011 21:14:54 GMT -5
Thank you Dark Dreams!
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