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Post by Riverrose ~April!!!~ on Jun 23, 2011 15:31:04 GMT -5
The sea splashed the world's shining eyes, Marching past in the air; Painted the stars in the surface pools, Threw flipped its tousled hair.
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Post by bcoyotey on Jun 23, 2011 21:44:23 GMT -5
This is breathtakingly beautiful Rosie. Painted the stars in the surface pools I love that line. That is a IWIWT line. (I wish I wrote that) Bravo! Lady B
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Ade
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Post by Ade on Jun 26, 2011 1:06:50 GMT -5
You managed to make something beautiful, and still concise, with what I've deemed to be an awkward collection of words. Not alone that, but you make it seem easy, as though you chose the words yourself, unrestricted. Your opening line is probably my favourite. "The sea splashed the world's shining eyes"... exquisite!
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Post by whitman on Jun 26, 2011 3:20:08 GMT -5
beautiful ans quite compelling
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Post by letslipthedogs on Jun 28, 2011 14:15:35 GMT -5
This is really beautiful. And out of those words... I'm in awe!
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Post by ladylilith ~stalwart~ on Jul 4, 2011 13:44:37 GMT -5
Stunning. You are the Queen of Drops for sure!
I love how encompassing this is in just three short lines. Beautifully done. I just love it!
Lily^^
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Post by BhindBluEyes♥ on Jul 28, 2011 12:23:20 GMT -5
Wow. I really love this. And only using those words.. It's spectacular.
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