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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Mar 30, 2005 2:50:25 GMT -5
Hypnotised J.A. Steckling
Created with a great deal of help from the Drops of Poetry board.
The moon bathes my naked form, illuminating silky skin. For just a moment the tears cease to fall from my eyes, and as time stands still we see the sky as art. Each star as an orchid, bright against grey clouds. In the muggy air lingers the smell of vanilla, and the door to my imagination opens, revealing a room strewn with rose petals and bathed in candlelight. Here is where the soul can feel as your senses falter. So lay out silently on top of hot stones, let the warm waterfall run over your exposed skin, and let the freedom and softness of life consume you. Allow yourself to be surrounded by white light, let your thoughts simmer in the heat of passion. All this achieved by closing your eyes, and letting go. Reality fades and into my dreams we wander. Everything is simple, you don't have to think unless you really want to. Each sound charms you into your dream within a dream, and with each soothing whisper, you continue on until you're in a world where everything is exactly as your heart desires.
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Post by dlebrtstrngr on Mar 31, 2005 0:45:19 GMT -5
Hey
I just read your poem.
A stunning example of exquisite literary simplicity and vibrant imagery, with very bold and strong emtions.
Until...
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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Apr 1, 2005 1:53:44 GMT -5
Thank you, very glad you liked the imagery, I think it had the most in it out of all my poems.
~ Jus
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Post by *Whisper* on Jul 24, 2006 15:26:27 GMT -5
WoW! This is one of the best DOP poems that i have read! Great job!
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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Aug 11, 2006 1:16:08 GMT -5
Aw, thanks so much! ;D I am very proud of it. Especially because it's a DOP piece. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by witheyesclosed [fading] on Aug 11, 2006 23:29:07 GMT -5
Amazing.
I miss you Jus.
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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Aug 24, 2006 23:23:38 GMT -5
Katie, Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.... I miss you, too....
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