360rider03
Established Muse
I make stories and live life...
Posts: 311
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Hollow
Mar 31, 2005 1:20:19 GMT -5
Post by 360rider03 on Mar 31, 2005 1:20:19 GMT -5
i sneak myself beneath the smiles embracing every star with soft secrets like a theif would desire the world, i search through faces that fell in the cold found a soul, an angel on earth the girl became a diamond i could not steal passion exists over the tears i taste we danced this battle hollow as death these strong fears dream in my eyes blossoming roses follow the tears i cry recoiled back into the haunting of this city [from the rose i dug left me a hole then turned the tides against me and burried my soul, time is a lesson, we learn as we grow old]
(had to finish in a hurry so the things in the brackets didnt really come from the drops...sorry)
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Hollow
Apr 12, 2005 1:56:00 GMT -5
Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Apr 12, 2005 1:56:00 GMT -5
I adore that line, the imagery is fantastic.
Great job rider, I loved the emotions here and the way you conveyed them.
-- Jus
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Hollow
Jul 24, 2006 15:24:01 GMT -5
Post by *Whisper* on Jul 24, 2006 15:24:01 GMT -5
Great imagery!!!! Great poem!!! Great write!
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Hollow
Jul 24, 2006 22:22:53 GMT -5
Post by bcoyotey on Jul 24, 2006 22:22:53 GMT -5
06rider, Great imagery & flow. Wonderful read. Kudos. Lady B
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