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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Feb 2, 2011 22:13:15 GMT -5
The overall effect is both unique and impressive. It really added to the mystique of the piece. very much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jan 24, 2011 1:06:19 GMT -5
Hi AshVan, great to see you trying out the drops, I love this, you've mangaged to capture the imagination and the flow is excellent. Especially love that last line. Thanks for sharing this
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jan 22, 2011 17:26:43 GMT -5
Shadows sigh A magic tower Beneath the world
Cynic composes Silent noise Clouds run overhead
Spectrum scores Illustrate Reasons underneath
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jan 22, 2011 17:24:06 GMT -5
Such an inteteresing and well written piece. Thanks for sharing
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jan 11, 2011 22:42:21 GMT -5
I agree, this is just incredible. Loved the flow and the wording and everything about this windowflower, gorgeous drops.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2010 7:14:30 GMT -5
Welcome to TPS, Jamie. This is a lovely drops. Perfectly crafted, excellent flow and some beautiful lines, very much enjoyed, thanks for sharing
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:37:34 GMT -5
I second that welcome, you capture the nerves and the exictment of getting married well in this. Really enjoyed reading it.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:35:43 GMT -5
Life of a shoe could be an alternate title, an amusing and interesting piece.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:34:36 GMT -5
Interesting piece, well constructed and great concept. Very much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:32:53 GMT -5
Because love is hard to define and it's human nature to question what we don't understand. Beautiful piece, very much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:30:25 GMT -5
I love the last stanza, sometimes I wish I had a fast forward/rewind/pause button for life. Beautiful.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2010 6:27:14 GMT -5
I liked the second stanza, it works really well. You capture the pain and frustration well.
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Love
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 25, 2010 4:22:14 GMT -5
Beautiful. A great summary of love and well constructed drops. Thanks for sharing
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Risks.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 16, 2010 18:56:12 GMT -5
Wow, this is quite a long drops piece and it has so much in it, I loved the second-last stanza and the third-last stanza also brilliant. I am incredibly impressed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 16, 2010 18:53:17 GMT -5
Alternatively if a picture's inspired you, you can post your poem in it's appropriate board and provide a link to the picture or an image, just make sure you acknowledge who the picture's by. I loved the beauty of this, puts me in mind of England with it's grand structures and tumbling ruins.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 8, 2010 19:50:26 GMT -5
I saw this as the dance of courtship between summer and winter, able to meet for only a moment, beautiful drops, excellently done.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 2, 2010 19:56:35 GMT -5
Endless questioning throughout kisses Lips proceeding in married ritual
then
Autumn breezes succeed in collecting my tears
Fears pretend to be a myth resulting in orchestra, a chapel A wedding (is it fake?)
Imminent news: agenda Leaves me going over ceremony Puzzling "why?" ... ... Love risks every boundary
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:50:03 GMT -5
Constant transformation disadvantages specialists Confidential heresy is hypothetical Then audience listens, blackmail procedure rages
Wandering beneath memory He steals a preview hope
Horror emerges, how was it foreseeable The chosen (desirable) daughter Exploded the faithful uniform Art, flutes, air flies down
Void
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:47:04 GMT -5
A great piece, intriguing and well paced. Loved the idea and you did a great job
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:43:29 GMT -5
"center a memory near hope"
that line was my favourite a stunning and brilliant drops.
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