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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:32:05 GMT -5
excellent rhythm with this from start to finish I was captivated.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:23:26 GMT -5
wow i almost couldn't believe this was a drops piece, it was incredible, with depth and flow and a beautiful rhythm. Much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 1, 2010 21:14:34 GMT -5
Flutes whistle...
A fairy listens She emerges, north void's daughter Wandering Renewing the faithful, A memory
Hope
Listen,
flutes are whistling...
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2010 22:28:12 GMT -5
Great to see a new face in the Drops It's a unique and challenging way to write poetry and I think you've done a good job with this. I liked the simplicity of it, the repetition of she can't hope really worked for me
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2010 22:22:20 GMT -5
A beautiful and inspired Drop, I am moved and impressed by the way this flowed and the strength of your words.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2010 22:19:29 GMT -5
Drops can be tricky but you've done well with this, I loved the last line in particular and the whole piece had good flow and feel
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 7, 2010 19:32:32 GMT -5
wow trees, this was brilliant, i loved the tightness of it the opening line was spot on and the ending beautifully done. Awesome drops
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:42:36 GMT -5
Choosing constant horror, My eccentricity warrants a specialist Confidential procedure, a circle Next examiner, next examiner...
She speaks "It is over"
Preview the void, air whistles in doubt Hope is revised, can't listen
Raging
Then my memory explodes Alien vessel
It is raining
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Bricks
Jul 4, 2010 19:41:11 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:41:11 GMT -5
An interesting piece, much enjoyed. Loved the thoughts that went into this, beautiful work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:38:32 GMT -5
A good drops, I liked the formatting and the simplicity of the lines in this. You chose your words carefully and well.
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Heresy
Jul 4, 2010 19:27:34 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:27:34 GMT -5
I loved the last line of this, a strong and well written drops piece.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:20:42 GMT -5
This was beautiful and incredible to read. Such expression and the format added even more to this. Amazing!
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Apr 13, 2010 20:34:26 GMT -5
wow this was an excellent drops, I was impressed by the length and the topic was really well expressed. Gorgeous work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Apr 13, 2010 19:17:05 GMT -5
I loved the formatting of this, it added another layer to an already complex and interesting piece. Would hardly know that it was a drop, it worked so well. Beautiful.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Apr 13, 2010 18:59:16 GMT -5
I loved this, each line was well crafted and the flow and thoughts were excellent.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 17, 2010 22:21:33 GMT -5
Hypothetical flutes renew stiff air. Their whistling warrants memory...
Darling, Faithful, Desirable, Admirable She listened
...A frequent hope explodes in horror
It is over
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 17, 2010 22:19:55 GMT -5
I agree, this didn't feel like a drops at all, it was excellent and the ending took my breath away. Beautiful work Trees.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 17, 2010 22:06:58 GMT -5
This was striiking, I loved it. reminds me of some of my family dinners recently. Beautiful drops.
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void
Mar 8, 2010 19:47:48 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 8, 2010 19:47:48 GMT -5
Simple and brilliant, like a jewel. Essence of the drops style captured in this beautiful piece.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Feb 2, 2010 20:21:54 GMT -5
My lonely struggle, dark tendrils Fear diamond flakes, snow crystals falling Calm my icy hopes
When arrested by dark void Lonliness, wretchedness Enlighten me, diamond candles Past terror
Snow crystals, fall Ice diamonds, precious Succeed in my comfort
(a/n that was hard, i think i slipped in a by to make the sentence flow)
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