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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Apr 4, 2012 6:21:32 GMT -5
This is a very deep drops, The second stanza in particular really spoke to me, brilliant work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 25, 2012 3:25:33 GMT -5
OH this is amazing, you worked in biochemistry, I wanted to but couldn't work out how. an excellent drops, flowing and interesting.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 18, 2012 6:16:02 GMT -5
time is reducing inconsistent goodness exceeding puzzles, saving him
(songbird interval)
heartland hell twinkling wealth goodbyes sound
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Mar 18, 2012 6:13:07 GMT -5
A very enjoyable drops, beautifully done. Great work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2011 0:23:02 GMT -5
closely critical religion even exceeding goodness worries wealth willed in inconsistent gravity is nasty misstatement
in shame songbirds dolefully dance
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2011 0:22:16 GMT -5
Gem indeed, a glorious sugary gem. It's brilliant, a creative and effective use of the words. Very much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2011 0:16:05 GMT -5
Yeah made me think of a big metroplex and over the announcement system comes this constant robotical screaming. A clever drops, very much enjoyed.
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Quiet
Dec 31, 2011 0:14:19 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2011 0:14:19 GMT -5
Wow Chelle! A brilliant drops with an elegant flow and a strong message, really loved that ending. Awesome work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 12, 2011 5:40:48 GMT -5
A very dark and disturbing drops, cleverly thought out for sure.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 2, 2011 0:57:04 GMT -5
Brilliant drops, very clever use of the words, much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 24, 2011 3:47:30 GMT -5
Interesting drops, welcome to TPS. I really liked the way this flowed, the story of it. Nice work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 22, 2011 4:40:25 GMT -5
Welcome to TPS a great drops excellent flow and that final stanza, brilliant.
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Nov 22, 2011 4:31:25 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 22, 2011 4:31:25 GMT -5
Welcome to TPS. This is a clever and well constructed drops. Loved the sneaky alliteration in there. Excellent work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 22, 2011 4:24:49 GMT -5
Wow, so much to enjoy in this, I love that second stanza. Brilliant drops.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 4, 2011 5:52:02 GMT -5
A great drop, very much enjoyed. Loved that stand alone final line, very effective piece.
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Lions
Oct 28, 2011 18:10:42 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 28, 2011 18:10:42 GMT -5
Hey Tabby great to see you in the drops. I really love this, it's a great piece that ending was awesome. Lovely write.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 24, 2011 6:13:36 GMT -5
welcome to the Drops board, thanks for being brave and posting it I really like it, that opening was really cool and such an interesting combination very much enjoyed this.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 22, 2011 0:36:42 GMT -5
wow. just wow, darling your drops pieces are always magnificent and this one is my new favourite. That ending was just wonderful.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 16, 2011 3:25:18 GMT -5
Sir Dan, a pleasure to see you visit the drops. This was beautiful, well crafted with a lovely fluidity to it. Really adored that opening and the thirs stanza. Gorgeous drops piece.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Sept 22, 2011 21:54:19 GMT -5
Wow, that's a fantastic drops, it flowed so well I wouldn't have guessed it was one, (a high compliment). I love the progression of this, and the contrasts with the white and black. Very much enjoyed.
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